Long time fan of your work on TikTok! I think your artwork is very beutiful and touching. So I had to play this instantly! I just finished the game in English, and I'm very interested in the lore and story. You have an incridible mind.
I've written down some things I noticed, and since you havn't asked for feedback it up to you entirely if you take it to heart or not :) I just really like your work and would love to see it in its entirety one day. Notes: - Some sentences have been split between two screens, making an awkward break when reading. Sometimes I can see its been intentional - which works really well (Like when meeting Assole for the first time) It creates tension. But when it comes in a long string of story building, it can be confusing. (idk if what I just wrote makes sense) - Maybe due to translation of the language, but some sentences sound a bit confusing at times. Though your writing is great and haunting, especially when Philomena is reflecting after speaking to Assole - also BEAUTIFUL art wow! - The music is great! It feels erie, as soon as the story begins you get the feeling something is wrong. Nothing to add there, the music is just wonderful!
-The writing sometimes jumps around in time, from being present to past tense. Not sure if this is intentional for the unease of the story
- The artwork and backgrounds are just as wonderful as always. You have such a beutiful artstyle, and I love that nothing feels out of place. We are inside this world from the first click.
All of this just to say that you've really got a talent. Your art is beautiful even when its depicting something as haunting as death. Your writing is also very beautiful, but needs a bit of tweaking to really get there - something I really believe you can <3
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Long time fan of your work on TikTok! I think your artwork is very beutiful and touching. So I had to play this instantly! I just finished the game in English, and I'm very interested in the lore and story. You have an incridible mind.
I've written down some things I noticed, and since you havn't asked for feedback it up to you entirely if you take it to heart or not :) I just really like your work and would love to see it in its entirety one day.
Notes:
- Some sentences have been split between two screens, making an awkward break when reading. Sometimes I can see its been intentional - which works really well (Like when meeting Assole for the first time) It creates tension. But when it comes in a long string of story building, it can be confusing. (idk if what I just wrote makes sense)
- Maybe due to translation of the language, but some sentences sound a bit confusing at times. Though your writing is great and haunting, especially when Philomena is reflecting after speaking to Assole - also BEAUTIFUL art wow!
- The music is great! It feels erie, as soon as the story begins you get the feeling something is wrong. Nothing to add there, the music is just wonderful!
-The writing sometimes jumps around in time, from being present to past tense. Not sure if this is intentional for the unease of the story
- The artwork and backgrounds are just as wonderful as always. You have such a beutiful artstyle, and I love that nothing feels out of place. We are inside this world from the first click.
All of this just to say that you've really got a talent. Your art is beautiful even when its depicting something as haunting as death. Your writing is also very beautiful, but needs a bit of tweaking to really get there - something I really believe you can <3
THANK YOU VERY MUCH
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